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Forum: Spot the Problem — Fix the Paragraph
Below is a weak paragraph. Read it carefully and post your analysis:
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Weak paragraph: Technology is everywhere today. Students use phones in class. Some teachers think this is bad. But the internet has a lot of information. Libraries are also useful. My cousin studies engineering. Technology helps people communicate. In conclusion, technology is important. |
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In your forum post (150–200 words), answer:
1. What is wrong with this paragraph? (Think about: topic sentence, unity, coherence, transitions)
2. Rewrite the paragraph so it has a clear topic sentence, at least two supporting details, and one or two transitions
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Then comment on one classmate's rewrite — what did they improve well? What could still be stronger?
Completion requirements:
- Make forum posts: 1
- Receive a grade
- Receive a passing grade
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